That Sonnet on guilt -- how's this?

[capri0mni]

I would imagine, in my early days,
Whom I would be, when fully an adult.
That phantom Self looks back with phantom gaze
Poised, now, to render verdict on my guilt.
My list of crimes is long, I am afraid:
Each dream neglected, that I left to rust,
Each promise that I neither kept nor made,
Each chance I never took, forever lost.
But what surprise! I am the elder me;
The girl that I once was is phantom, now.
And in some quantum state, both I and We,
Must face the future from this point, somehow.

There lies, within my palm, a jailor's key
To turn within the lock, to set Me free.

Comments

[lizziebelle.livejournal.com]

Oh, I like it! I think everyone can relate to that. :)

[capriuni.livejournal.com]

Thanks. That's what I was hoping for...

One of the requirements for Art Garden pieces is that we avoid Strum und Drung... which is rather difficult, when the theme is "guilt."

[barbarafett.livejournal.com]

I like it, too! :-)