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Ann ([personal profile] capri0mni) wrote 2014-06-13 03:54 pm (UTC)

Good catch.

"Which" strikes me as a relatively weak word, though.

How about I make that line more independent by making it the start of a complete sentence?

It always happened -- every episode
[. . .]

And if the penultimate line were:

Could I have understood, young as I was:

?

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