What I did yesterday....

[capri0mni]

Well, mostly:

I worked on that Irish Proverb Song! And I think it's done, or nearly.

Here it is:

Sweetest Morsels

Oh, the king's table groans 'neath the weight of the feast,
With the venison, pheasant and boar.
But the pride of the cook, and the gem of the meal
Is the fine and the rare peppercorn!

A toast to the berry, so sweet on the vine,
and the carrots we pull in the spring!
To hot roasted chestnuts on cold winter nights
And the moments that make our hearts sing!

Oh, the pages of history tell of great wars
And the capers of powerful men.
But the things we remember are often as small,
As the song of the sweet Jenny Wren

A toast to the berry, so sweet on the vine,
and the carrots we pull in the spring!
To hot roasted chestnuts on cold winter nights
And the moments that make our hearts sing!

Leave the tales of the war and the struggle and strife
To the pens of the squinty eyed scribes.
For the music and laughter, and sweet stolen kiss
Are the moments that season our lives!

A toast to the berry, so sweet on the vine,
and the carrots we pull in the spring!
To hot roasted chestnuts on cold winter nights
And the moments that make our hearts sing!
---

To hear the tune (or get a .pdf of the dots), copy and paste the bold text below into the text window at Concertina.net's Tune-o-Tron, and click on "submit" (if it doesn't work, you may want to try turning off your pop-up blockers).

X:1
T:Sweetest Morsels
M:4/4
Q:1/4=105
K:F
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G2FGA2AG|F2EDC2DE|F4z3C|F2FFG2GF|E2DEF2GG|B2BBA2AA|
G3zFD2D|DE2EEG2F|EF2zGGA2|GFE2DE2F|-F4z4||

(and a note to Dad: now that you have a new 'puter, you probably have the right software installed for the Tune-o-Tron to work... may take awhile, but try it!)

I made nearly all the changes based on advice in a discussion thread, here: 'Irish Proverb' song by CapriUni. I'm including the link because I think the folks at Mudcat are wonderful, and I wanted to give credit where credit is due.

And now: A poll!

[Poll #635209]

[ETA: And does anyone else out there find it annoying that you have to answer your own poll before you can see the results right there on your lj page?]

Comments

[indefatigable42.livejournal.com]

I don't remember where I had to click, but you can see the results without answering it yourself. I think when you click on the Reply button, there are options at the top of the page for things like 'View Results'. I think that's where it is.

On the first one: 'Campaigns' breaks up the rhythm because the emphasis is on a different syllable. The 'capers' pun is cute, but not obvious enough to make the cuteness outweigh the singability of the word 'antics'. ^^ 'Antics' is also the most belittling to those powerful men who think they're so important.

'Kiss on the sly' sings better than either of the other options. I definitely like 'morsels' better than moments because it ties in with the food chorus, and I like 'sweeten' over 'season' for singability.

[capriuni.livejournal.com]

You can click on the Poll #XXXXX thing, and then click "view results," but I meant just seeing the poll results in your journal entry itself, without having to click onto another page. It shows automatically like that (either on your own page, or someone else's) as soon as you take the poll, since you're only allowed to vote once. But since I wrote the poll, I don't intend to answer. I should just remember to include a "ticky box!" type option, for me to click as soon as I post it, I suppose.

Thanks for your feedback on the song. For some reason, I was singing "campaign" with the accent on the first syllable, but of course, that's incorrect (that little voice in my head sometimes says "pho-to-GRAPH-y," too... dunno why).

And "kiss on the sly" / "morsels that sweeten" was a solution that came to my head when I first woke up, this morning, so that's a good sign. I was just worried that there were too many s and sl- sounds in that combo, to make the lines to tounge-twistery. Thank you for reassuring me that it's singable...

[indefatigable42.livejournal.com]

S- and sl- sounds can be singable with practice. Too much m-, n-, and -ns as in 'moments that season' feels mumbly... it's harder to get the mouth open in between the consonants. ^^;

[capriuni.livejournal.com]

Ah -- I see.

What about "Flavor," then (that was another choice I was thinking of, as pepper doesn't exactly 'sweeten' the roast)?