Script Frenzy update.
Jun. 3rd, 2007 11:41 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
capri0mniWell, just like NanoWrimo, there's now a section where you can upload an excerpt of your script for the Whole Wide World looniest bunch of your friends to read.
The only problem is, I couldn't manage to upload a bit without it borking the formatting of the webpage. Sorry about that. It's probably growing pains on their part (first year, and all). Still, if you're interested (and you don't mind risking a massive headache) the bit I uploaded can be found here.
Oh, and for those who are curious (especially![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
drox, who suggested it), I did decide to go with the tapestry-cum-montage idea for the beginning. I'll put it under a cut, thusly (again, I can't get the formatting right without either the automatic macros, or a lot of fiddling. So if you'll forgive me, I won't bother with that):
FADE In:
INT/Museum GALLERY - DAY
The gallery is wide, and constructed to look like the hall of a great castle: the walls on either side are lined with rich, detailed tapestries, clearly very old and faded. The floor is paved with gleaming gray slate, and the ceiling is vaulted marble. Between the tapestries, on the walls are light sconces – once used to hold torches, now fitted with bright, decorative, electric lights. Scattered groups of museum goers, in twos and threes move through the hall, talking, but their voices echo in the vast space, and we cannot make out what any individual is saying.
We draw through the into one small crowd, standing around the where a museum tour guide is speaking.
GUIDE
I'd like to welcome you all here, today, to the Gryphon Tapestries Exhibit.
We pan into a close up on the tapestry, showing two castes, one in each corner. The one in the upper left hand corner stands beside a sharply peaked mountain, with a crooked top; a blue flag with a yellow eagle flies from its tower. The castle in the upper right hand corner is on a cliff over the ocean; a red flag with a white lion flies from its tower.
Guide (o.s.)
As you probably know by now, a gryphon has the body of a lion, the head and wings of an eagle, and the ears of a donkey. These tapestries
were woven to commemorate the wedding and alliance between two distant kingdoms, whose two royal emblems were an eagle and a lion. These panels tell the story of how that alliance came about ...
Her voice fades into the background hum, as we pan even closer to the tapestry, focusing on a point in the foreground, directly between the two kingdoms: a SOLDIER, with tattered clothes, leaning on his sword for support, is standing at a crossroads. Standing with him is a WITCH, of very short, child-like stature with grotesque, donkey-like, ears, a long nose and fangs.
DISOLVE TO:
EXT/CROSSROADS – NIGHT
This is clearly the same scene we were seeing in the tapestry, though the characters are far less grotesque and exaggerated. The soldier has a golden eagle emblem on the armband of his right sleeve.
BACKSTORY MONTAGE
-there is no sound except RENAISSANCE INSTRUMENTAL throughout. The witch is talking with VORTIGERN, gesticulating energetically, and Vortigern is bent toward her, listening intently.
-the ring rolls to the base of a TROLL'S HOARD, and CLINKS.
-The TROLL wakes, opening one red, glowing eye. He glances down at the RING, CHUCKLES ominously, BELCHES smoke, and goes back to sleep, SNORING.
-We end on a pull-back from the troll's cave, to reveal that it's the same mountain we'd seen pictured in the tapestry.
The only problem is, I couldn't manage to upload a bit without it borking the formatting of the webpage. Sorry about that. It's probably growing pains on their part (first year, and all). Still, if you're interested (and you don't mind risking a massive headache) the bit I uploaded can be found here.
Oh, and for those who are curious (especially
drox, who suggested it), I did decide to go with the tapestry-cum-montage idea for the beginning. I'll put it under a cut, thusly (again, I can't get the formatting right without either the automatic macros, or a lot of fiddling. So if you'll forgive me, I won't bother with that):FADE In:
INT/Museum GALLERY - DAY
The gallery is wide, and constructed to look like the hall of a great castle: the walls on either side are lined with rich, detailed tapestries, clearly very old and faded. The floor is paved with gleaming gray slate, and the ceiling is vaulted marble. Between the tapestries, on the walls are light sconces – once used to hold torches, now fitted with bright, decorative, electric lights. Scattered groups of museum goers, in twos and threes move through the hall, talking, but their voices echo in the vast space, and we cannot make out what any individual is saying.
We draw through the into one small crowd, standing around the where a museum tour guide is speaking.
GUIDE
I'd like to welcome you all here, today, to the Gryphon Tapestries Exhibit.
We pan into a close up on the tapestry, showing two castes, one in each corner. The one in the upper left hand corner stands beside a sharply peaked mountain, with a crooked top; a blue flag with a yellow eagle flies from its tower. The castle in the upper right hand corner is on a cliff over the ocean; a red flag with a white lion flies from its tower.
Guide (o.s.)
As you probably know by now, a gryphon has the body of a lion, the head and wings of an eagle, and the ears of a donkey. These tapestries
were woven to commemorate the wedding and alliance between two distant kingdoms, whose two royal emblems were an eagle and a lion. These panels tell the story of how that alliance came about ...
Her voice fades into the background hum, as we pan even closer to the tapestry, focusing on a point in the foreground, directly between the two kingdoms: a SOLDIER, with tattered clothes, leaning on his sword for support, is standing at a crossroads. Standing with him is a WITCH, of very short, child-like stature with grotesque, donkey-like, ears, a long nose and fangs.
DISOLVE TO:
EXT/CROSSROADS – NIGHT
This is clearly the same scene we were seeing in the tapestry, though the characters are far less grotesque and exaggerated. The soldier has a golden eagle emblem on the armband of his right sleeve.
BACKSTORY MONTAGE
-there is no sound except RENAISSANCE INSTRUMENTAL throughout. The witch is talking with VORTIGERN, gesticulating energetically, and Vortigern is bent toward her, listening intently.
- [snip - its a long montage; a whole bunch of stuff happens, then:]
-the ring rolls to the base of a TROLL'S HOARD, and CLINKS.
-The TROLL wakes, opening one red, glowing eye. He glances down at the RING, CHUCKLES ominously, BELCHES smoke, and goes back to sleep, SNORING.
-We end on a pull-back from the troll's cave, to reveal that it's the same mountain we'd seen pictured in the tapestry.
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Date: 2007-06-04 05:28 am (UTC)I can say NOTHING MEANINGFUL, but I read this and liked it:)
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Date: 2007-06-04 01:24 pm (UTC)And yes, Screnzy (as people are starting to call it) is very shiny. I love the people behind it as much as anyone can love strangers. Because they've extended their mission beyond November Novels, they've changed their name to: Office of Letters and Light, which is shiny by definition...
One thing I'm learning is that a movie script is very much like any other story I've ever written, but I do have to remind myself not to type she said after a pause. ;-)